Writing again

So you may have read in my recent post a comment from a writing friend.  There is a competition happening through kidlit.com  check it out on my sidebar I have posted  a link. 
Anyway, I am editing a couple of my books to send in the first 500 words.  Wow talk about nerve wracking how do you make sure the first 500 sell your book??

Here is the first few sentences of each.....

Under the Surface (better known as stinky Jimmy in my writing group)

As I look back now at 35, I see that the most pivotal time in my life was the summer after my eighth grade year. To think that in one summer I learned more about the world than in all my years before and most of my years after, is really a testament to the impact one person has on another.

The Naughty Fairy

Phia Lee moved to the dead end, of the dead end, of the dead ends. Well not just Phia but her whole family which was her, Mom, Dad and of course her Beagle Lou.

Just to give you an idea, 500 words is about 2 1/2 pages......

Wish me luck, or wish me skill would be better.